My business card says I’m a writer, a blogger, and a poet, but I’m going to add dreamer to the mix. Below is a poem I’m working on now. I’m not sure if I’m finished with it but hope to be by September 6th, the next meeting of my critique group. It’s already been through a first draft and they made some suggestions. But it’s always subject to change. It’s both what I like about poetry. And what I don’t like.
Having grown up on the tropical island of Guam and living near the coastal communities of northern and southern California the beach is always on my mind and now it’s taken up residence in my daydreams.
I did the best I could so far, but it doesn’t seem like enough. So here you go. Do you want to see more? Would you use punctuation? Where do you go in your daydreams?
Someday
Sometimes I dream this dry grass is gold sand
and the sea is just over the rise
Someday I’ll live there
Where the sun breaks each day as I open my door
and I welcome its warm caress
I’ll stride there
To the top of the mound and discover a cypress for shade
I’ll set myself down and breathe in sync with the tides
until the night settles around
Yes Barbara, you and I share the dream of seeing a sunset or the sunrise over the water and not the house across the street.
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I would love to live on the beach
Someday love it.
beautiful imagery
I love your strong images. The beach is my favorite place too.
So nurturing, healing and restorative to my soul…
I love the northern pacific coast also, had a someday plan of my own to move near Fort Bragg. The poem hits that note with me even though I now realize I won’t have energy to move again in this life…. I can still visit the coast, I can still daydream.
Thank you for the comment, Sue. Yes. Keep dreaming! I especially like how you can arrange the weather in a daydream to your liking. No storms, no strong winds, mild temps, etc.
Evocative. I like this almost poem a lot. I think the line “To the top of the mound and discover a cypress for shade” could use a little finessing to make it as elegant as the lines preceding it.
Good call, Laura. I’ll take another look at that. Thanks for the comment.